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A Little Foggy

The fog is so thick I can not see the sticks, that in a wasted life, rise off the dirty grave of the forest floor. There is no beauty that could compare to the sight of the thick ground clouds, that embrace my morning. To run through the moisturous blanket into the unseen and unknown would be a spectacular thrill. The cool droplet of water stroking my feet, as they are released from the tall finger grasses. tickle me kindly. I chase the fog as its spread of mystery begins to rise and confines back up into the sky. I reach for the heartbeat of the fog, hoping that surrounding my skin, with its life, it would carry me away. I dance with it deeper into the dense woods, where it awakens the pine trees, with its wet breath. Higher and higher the fog rises. I climb a welcoming oak tree, stretching with its limbs grabbing for the clouds. Take me away my morning fog, I want to ride this elevator to the sky, to the heavens, take me away. The fog disappaites and I am left with misty hands and empty eyes. I look around clearly, seeing the crispness of nature, basking in all her beauty From the heights of this old oak tree, I realize... I am lost. Vibrant Verse Contest 07/30/2014

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Date: 9/3/2014 9:06:00 PM
Hi CT, stopping by to say hi, and check out your reply... :) PD
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Date: 8/26/2014 10:24:00 AM
Beautiful poem-I love all the imagery it was magical. One of my faves now. Thank you---loved it !!! :-) Christine
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Ct Duet
Date: 9/3/2014 2:18:00 PM
Thank you Christine from both Casarah and myself....hugs Tim
Date: 8/24/2014 11:45:00 AM
Hi CT Duet, :) Thank you for the nice reply on my comment <3 LINDA
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Ct Duet
Date: 9/3/2014 2:17:00 PM
You are most welcome :)
Date: 8/7/2014 8:18:00 AM
wonderful imagery!
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Tim Smith
Date: 8/7/2014 1:52:00 PM
Thank you darling from both Casarah and me...hugs Tim
Date: 8/6/2014 10:32:00 PM
NICE DUET CAS AND TIM....,, Congrats, on your win. <3 LINDA
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Tim Smith
Date: 8/7/2014 1:54:00 PM
Thanks sweetie.....hugs Cas and Tim
Date: 8/4/2014 4:50:00 AM
Congrats...Sara
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Tim Smith
Date: 8/7/2014 1:53:00 PM
Thanks Sara from Cas and me...hugs
Date: 8/2/2014 5:24:00 AM
Wow! I'm pleasantly and mysteriously impressed by this captivating collaboration! Love how you made use of the fog to convey your blended thoughts. Congratulations!! // paul
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Ct Duet
Date: 8/2/2014 11:28:00 AM
Thank you Paul from both of us....Love your insightfulness and such beautiful comment.
Date: 8/2/2014 2:01:00 AM
Yayyy, so good to see this one on the list. COngrats to you.
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Ct Duet
Date: 8/2/2014 11:26:00 AM
Thank you Andrea from us both...we are honored to be placed
Date: 8/2/2014 1:29:00 AM
Great vibrancy out of ur pen Tim! congrats on ur win!
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Ct Duet
Date: 8/2/2014 11:24:00 AM
Thank you Upma from the both of us...hugs
Date: 8/1/2014 7:10:00 PM
That clears up the mystery. I was wondering why two poets had chosen the same theme to write about. Well done and congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 8/2/2014 11:22:00 AM
Thank you Joyce...Our styles are strikingly similar and Casarah is such a pleasure to work with...blessings Tim
Date: 8/1/2014 6:35:00 PM
well, I only just realized that casarah was the other half of the duo, she's won twice! lol and how strange that I should place both pieces together! I thought the descriptions in this were very effective - phrases such as "dirty grave of the forest floor" and the fog's "wet breath" - you really brought the fog to life, and created quite an eerie atmosphere with your words - congrats to both of you! :)
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Ct Duet
Date: 8/2/2014 2:16:00 PM
Thank You Charlotte. We are thrilled and honored at our placement...Casarah and Tim
Date: 8/1/2014 6:06:00 PM
Well, I didn't know until now that this is Casarah and Tim...writing in duet. I love this piece. I am from West Virginia where the fog can move in quickly and gathers most evenings in the river valleys. I love writing about it and you all have done a bang up job with this great write. Congratulations.
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Date: 8/1/2014 8:10:00 PM
Thanks, I have had some pretty foggy mornings lately, it is beautiful to see the woods surrounded by fog. thanks for reading Faye, :) we both appreciate it :)
Date: 8/1/2014 5:41:00 PM
This is wonderful poetry........ from two amazing writers.....who blend beautifully, and take us into that tree and out of the fog! Loved it.....congrats to you!!
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Ct Duet
Date: 8/2/2014 11:21:00 AM
Thank you Carrie...It is quite the honor to be up on the podium with such beautiful poets as yourself. Casarah & Tim
Date: 7/30/2014 3:29:00 PM
Way to go for the contest..Reads like a winner with the very expressive and descriptive lines..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Tim Smith
Date: 7/31/2014 8:52:00 PM
Thanks Sara from both Casarah and me...hugs Tim
Date: 7/30/2014 3:20:00 PM
and so THIS is your vibrant verse entry. I would say this will do SUPER DUPER. Much more descriptive than mine was. Awesome!!
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Tim Smith
Date: 7/31/2014 8:50:00 PM
Thanks Andrea hugs
Date: 7/30/2014 3:18:00 PM
haha, so you got right in under the gun same as me in that contest of charlottes? You must have been #35 because I was 34th. Let me see this poem now.
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