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A Big Fat Lie

I’m sorry! I regret the past. winked his eye.

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Jan Allison

Date: 10/28/2015 2:33:00 PM

The eyes say so much - very clever indeed ...I would class it as a senryu:-) hugs jan xx

Rahy Hy
Date: 10/28/2015 2:48:00 PM

Done! thanks for reading my poem :) hugs xx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/28/2015 2:45:00 PM

If you look at the example for senryu on soup that doesn't follow the traditional 5 7 5 syllables count - I guess it could be classed as a 'modern senryu' like haiku are nowadays :-( hugs jan xx

Rahy Hy
Date: 10/28/2015 2:38:00 PM

Thanks Jan for your comment. Syllable won't work for a senryu, would it?!