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Eyes Pierced By Flakes

Eyes, tainted by snow flakes of damp memoirs; spiky frostbites chafing her irises. Drained lids quiver on a funeral trail lacing sharp ache; iced droplets pierced like flakes. Andrea Dietrich's Contest LEAF, FEATHER, SHELL or FLAKE 8/4/2014: Form: Tetractys Theme: Flakes

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Date: 2/10/2016 12:33:00 PM

I'm currently doing a school project on Tetractys. I had to look at ten that I liked from the internet. In my list, this one is my all time favorite. I love this poem and how its simple but makes you think. Thank you for creating such a lovely poem. ~ Carrie

Mark Trichet

Date: 8/21/2014 10:22:00 PM

Enjoy reading your work Nette, once again this sings across the net...Congrats

Kelly Deschler

Date: 8/19/2014 10:40:00 PM

I really enjoyed reading this beautiful poem, once again. It was nice to see it on the winner's list! Congratulations to you, Nette! Wonderful work!

Faye Gibson

Date: 8/19/2014 8:20:00 PM

Brings sad and poignant images to mind, Nette. I love the way you used "spiky frostbites chaffing" and "lacing sharp ache." Congratulations.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/18/2014 9:04:00 AM

Sad and beautiful. Congratulations Nette.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 8/18/2014 6:57:00 AM

melancholy, musing, intriguing...for me, it conjures the image of someone tearful at a bleak funeral in mid winter...a good rendering of a very restrictive form - congrats on your win!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/18/2014 5:36:00 AM

Stunning piece of a poem, nette. congrats on the win

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/17/2014 10:20:00 PM

Nette, Congratulations, in Andrea's sorta Shell, contest:)....Love Linda

Jan Allison

Date: 8/17/2014 5:46:00 PM

dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/17/2014 5:43:00 PM

Nette, I like how this seemed to be a contradiction of sharpness(pain) with the softness of the flakes. Kind of a deep one for me, but I sure love the way you used the sounds. Congrats for your win in my contest.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 8/12/2014 2:58:00 PM

The bitter cold winds on a winters day always makes the tears fall from my eyes.... but, I think there is something more to this poem than just a natural reaction to the cold.... I love the depth in this melancholy piece. Lovely work, Nette. Good luck in Andrea's contest!

Donna Jones

Date: 8/8/2014 2:52:00 PM

This feels written from personal pain...so deeply felt nett...very moving

David Mohn

Date: 8/7/2014 12:13:00 PM

This is really beautifully written in a tough form Nette...wonderful

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/6/2014 6:56:00 PM

Oh, yes, putting emotions with the icy snowy day. A great idea, Nette. Better than average tetractys.

Len Gasun

Date: 8/5/2014 12:01:00 PM

An excellent tetractys poem you've penned my very dear friend Nette. Super like. Kudos again with hugs! Thank u soo much. I'll be back to read more of your work soon ok. Anyway, I'm lookin forward for another holiday:)) Just peeking now after all my assignments tonight, whew! then, i'll go to bed in few min. Sendin u many hugs! tcare always. Tysm also for stoppin by on my latest poem. Goodnight & GBU. love lots, lors