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Eyes, tainted by snow flakes of damp memoirs; spiky frostbites chafing her irises. Drained lids quiver on a funeral trail lacing sharp ache; iced droplets pierced like flakes. Andrea Dietrich's Contest LEAF, FEATHER, SHELL or FLAKE 8/4/2014: Form: Tetractys Theme: Flakes

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  1. Date: 8/21/2014 10:22:00 PM
    Enjoy reading your work Nette, once again this sings across the net...Congrats

  1. Date: 8/19/2014 10:40:00 PM
    I really enjoyed reading this beautiful poem, once again. It was nice to see it on the winner's list! Congratulations to you, Nette! Wonderful work!

  1. Date: 8/19/2014 8:20:00 PM
    Brings sad and poignant images to mind, Nette. I love the way you used "spiky frostbites chaffing" and "lacing sharp ache." Congratulations.

  1. Date: 8/18/2014 9:04:00 AM
    Sad and beautiful. Congratulations Nette.

  1. Date: 8/18/2014 6:57:00 AM
    melancholy, musing, intriguing...for me, it conjures the image of someone tearful at a bleak funeral in mid winter...a good rendering of a very restrictive form - congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 8/18/2014 5:36:00 AM
    Stunning piece of a poem, nette. congrats on the win

  1. Date: 8/17/2014 10:20:00 PM
    Nette, Congratulations, in Andrea's sorta Shell, contest:)....Love Linda

  1. Date: 8/17/2014 5:46:00 PM
    dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs jan xxx

  1. Date: 8/17/2014 5:43:00 PM
    Nette, I like how this seemed to be a contradiction of sharpness(pain) with the softness of the flakes. Kind of a deep one for me, but I sure love the way you used the sounds. Congrats for your win in my contest.

  1. Date: 8/12/2014 2:58:00 PM
    The bitter cold winds on a winters day always makes the tears fall from my eyes.... but, I think there is something more to this poem than just a natural reaction to the cold.... I love the depth in this melancholy piece. Lovely work, Nette. Good luck in Andrea's contest!

  1. Date: 8/8/2014 2:52:00 PM
    This feels written from personal deeply felt nett...very moving

  1. Date: 8/7/2014 12:13:00 PM
    This is really beautifully written in a tough form Nette...wonderful

  1. Date: 8/6/2014 6:56:00 PM
    Oh, yes, putting emotions with the icy snowy day. A great idea, Nette. Better than average tetractys.

  1. Date: 8/5/2014 12:01:00 PM
    An excellent tetractys poem you've penned my very dear friend Nette. Super like. Kudos again with hugs! Thank u soo much. I'll be back to read more of your work soon ok. Anyway, I'm lookin forward for another holiday:)) Just peeking now after all my assignments tonight, whew! then, i'll go to bed in few min. Sendin u many hugs! tcare always. Tysm also for stoppin by on my latest poem. Goodnight & GBU. love lots, lors

  1. Date: 8/5/2014 7:05:00 AM
    Eyes avalanched in snow so cold that this window to the soul portends the deepest winter a heart could ever know.. Beautiful poet master!

  1. Date: 8/5/2014 4:46:00 AM
    truly ever so poetic nette, just love this,,, brings home the way it can be...

  1. Date: 8/5/2014 12:35:00 AM
    Your expressive image on sullen eyes is chilling and throbbing. I wish I wrote this magnificent poem. Nette, you drew me in!

  1. Date: 8/4/2014 11:09:00 PM
    ..and yet here they are..once again. Thank you Nette

  1. Date: 8/4/2014 6:28:00 PM
    A cool scene for hot days. Keep it up! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 8/4/2014 6:02:00 PM
    Oh those poor the imagery nette...hugs Tim