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---The Last Lilly

the last lilly in a spent garden shuttered window

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Jack Horne

Date: 11/8/2011 11:08:00 AM

Yes, I think I'm definitely getting it - and the shuttered window adds to the sense of desolation

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/18/2011 7:34:00 AM

Andie, the one above which you label the modern way is more accurate in representing traditional Japanese haiku, and I don't just mean 5/7/5 the mistakes, glaring mistakes, which are being made here by poets make the addition of a few more syllables the least of the problem. What folks are writing is simply whatever they want and putting it into a 5/7/5 pattern and calling it haiku because of the syllable count. If I call a cat a dog it doesn't make it one.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/18/2011 2:50:00 AM

Yes, this is haiku. REmember when I first met you and you were so green about haiku? I know many times I do not do them the modern way but it's because many judges dom't care about the new modern rules. I think it's fun to do the old fashioned way sometimes as well. soupmail about your contest.

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/17/2011 11:48:00 AM

as if in a painting.....I can see it, and it makes me wish to be the artist. Lovely haiku!

Susan Buchel

Date: 9/17/2011 9:50:00 AM

a wonderful way to mark the changing season...

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 9/16/2011 10:54:00 PM

Kind of sad...beautifully written. BG

Deb Wilson

Date: 9/16/2011 6:13:00 PM

melancholy.. lovely too! love,Deb

Russell Sivey

Date: 9/16/2011 5:02:00 PM

Great job Debbie! I really like this Haiku! I love the imagery that your Haiku paints. Especially the "in a spent garden" line...perfect for where you were taking the poem to! I tried another Haiku, the most recent one, and I was hoping it was close to where I was supposed to be in writing it!! Check it out if you like!! Awesome work on this poem!!

Joe Maverick

Date: 9/16/2011 4:41:00 PM

Can't wait for the window to re-open...

Prince Ekpemandu

Date: 9/16/2011 4:40:00 PM

beautiful...loving this one...keep the good work up

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/16/2011 4:30:00 PM

vibrant visual Debbie and a somber scene of fading weather of warmth to cold .. I luv the lily so pure and white ..