Heart Gentle Eye Mindful

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Written: May 18, 2024, For Unseeking Seeker Contest ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Languid breath dwindles, scrounging panacea air quiddity remorse core conveyed mindful glare seraphim guilt throe stems from mind sapidity heart wispy ousts weltschmerz, hatred morbidity. Gentleness key squeals heart-tangled inner thread unboxed core lead ecstatic heart hobnobbed tread Is my heart-mind rancor overlaid by hazy myopia? milk with ice is a quintessential pillar of utopia. Shepherding pragmatic apotheosis wide universe hampered altruistic love ephemeral zeitgeists verse emotional outbursts during meiosis—placate impact forging forfend feeling fallacy focusing on facts. Seeking soothing sense as silk-satin smoothness fetches forbearance, fosters faith hearty-filled fewness ripple aposiopesis words transcend catharsis sight sate sinew, eschew omniscience, heed hubris might. Living stubbornly with caesura implies life-moored we are living offhand, leaving us brittle but allured Issues occur wisely rather than haphazardly sought willing for heart-mind coo to fulfill what's taught. With authenticity, grace, sympathy, and tolerance respect all people, despite views or providence uphold merciful attitude and passionate mind brain-heart harmony molded by cosmic pull blind.

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Tonye George

Date: 5/29/2024 4:33:00 AM

Congratulations Dear, Sotto on your wonderful piece and win.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/20/2024 11:43:00 PM

This is a fine poem of equilibrium. I enjoy this positive outlook.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 5/20/2024 4:52:00 PM

SP, There's a lot to take in. You have some great suggestions for how we should behave. This is a great follow up from your last entry...the heart-mind coo is a coup! Hope we can be like this. At least we are here!

Ink Empress

Date: 5/20/2024 1:33:00 AM

Ah dr sotto what a profound write this is, one that flows with exquisite alliterations and diction using poetic techniques to deliver one that flows with not just wisdom but philosophical depth! Very creative is the way your rhymes flow and i love the uniqueness of your diction! And theres so much one can take from this write! But most importantly it covers the prompt in a very meaningful manner! I love the lines “ Seeking soothing sense as silk-satin smoothness”-cadence of that stanza! Wow! BOL

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/19/2024 6:05:00 AM

A powerful message you convey, my friend: With authenticity, grace, sympathy, and tolerance respect all people---uphold merciful attitude and passionate mind---words of wisdom reverberate the essence of your theme, Lasaad.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/19/2024 4:59:00 AM

I enjoyed the wisdom within your poem (Living stubbornly with caesura implies life-moored). I also liked the fluidity of your rhyme scheme and your level of vocabulary skillfully used to craft your message of living with authenticity, grace, sympathy, and tolerance. A lovely contest entry. Best wishes with the contest, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Silent One

Date: 5/19/2024 4:16:00 AM

Hey Sotto, your poem evokes a sense of struggle and resolution, as the speaker grapples with complex emotions and philosophical questions. The imagery of "seeking soothing sense as silk-satin smoothness" and "living stubbornly with caesura" conveys both the difficulties and the serenity found in introspection and personal growth.

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 5/19/2024 3:03:00 AM

Splendid if difficult diction. Great rhyme and flow of verse. Very deep in thought. Had to read it twice and hear the recording. Such complex emotions.